This was an entertaining read. Big problem, though: You need to decide whether you're writing in past tense or present tense, and stick with it. The constant swapping pulls a reader out of the story.
Hi, Peter! The story structure vaguely reminds me of this book I encountered last year in college. It's called "I Remember" by Joe Brainard. It's kind of a word collage of memories. Since you like experimental fiction, perhaps it will intrigue you.
Also, my favorite thing from this story was actually your dialogue! Each line sounds incredibly natural, like real people are speaking them. As someone who struggles with creating believable dialogue, you've definitely impressed me. :)
This is a great recommendation for me, thanks again! I'm working on a fictional memoir project that is similar in style. Amazing find. You are a godsend <3
Thanks so much, I just got done with part two of your story. I'm really enjoying it and honestly I looked out for your dialogue, and I'm not sure you really struggle there too much. You're a great writer.
Oh wow! It's called " I Remember" as well ? Interesting. I will definitely have to give it a look. And thank you for your kind words and taking the time to read. It means a lot to me.
This was an entertaining read. Big problem, though: You need to decide whether you're writing in past tense or present tense, and stick with it. The constant swapping pulls a reader out of the story.
Hi, Peter! The story structure vaguely reminds me of this book I encountered last year in college. It's called "I Remember" by Joe Brainard. It's kind of a word collage of memories. Since you like experimental fiction, perhaps it will intrigue you.
Also, my favorite thing from this story was actually your dialogue! Each line sounds incredibly natural, like real people are speaking them. As someone who struggles with creating believable dialogue, you've definitely impressed me. :)
This is a great recommendation for me, thanks again! I'm working on a fictional memoir project that is similar in style. Amazing find. You are a godsend <3
I've read a couple of your other works, and I think memoir writing suits you well! Keep going. I'll look forward to your next post. :))
Thanks so much, I just got done with part two of your story. I'm really enjoying it and honestly I looked out for your dialogue, and I'm not sure you really struggle there too much. You're a great writer.
Oh wow! It's called " I Remember" as well ? Interesting. I will definitely have to give it a look. And thank you for your kind words and taking the time to read. It means a lot to me.